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Post by eric on Mar 2, 2009 21:47:21 GMT -5
Blue= Both
Purple= Girl
Green= Guy
"Leave."
Leave me
Leave me now
Before it's too late
I'll bring you down..
I've seen the dark
I've gotten the mark
You just don't see
what has has happened to me
So leave me here
I've shed all of my tears
You've seen my fears
I am possessed
...So depressed
The dark will take you in
I can't even begin
to tell you why,
why I cry
I dance with darkness
The power I hold
feel it fold
It will take you
eat you up
feel your strength,
it's leaving fast
Don't let me in.
Don't let it in.
The cold's embrace
I must face,
I'll save you from.
Too cold,
too painful.
Too old,
too fearful.
I'll hide,
as a ocean's tide.
I draw you close,
sweep you up.
Carry you in the dark,
give you my mark.
Your wish-
My pleasure.
It's only too happy
to take..
Make you writhe,
It's too much.
Stay away.
Dangers today.
Leave me here, I will not fear,
The darkness is my being now
[/color] Just a song I wrote up in the middle of my class after feeling sick about even thinking of letting this guy get close to me, cause I'm afraid he'll get drawn into my bad habits. |
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Post by Dakota on Mar 9, 2009 19:36:33 GMT -5
Ohmaigawd, Cain-san. I love it. I love the poeticness, and how it's really true about girls once they get older. Boys just need to leave us alone, we're not toys. But, not like I'd know, no one's asked me out.
What instrument are you planning on playing it on? And do you have a chorus? 'Cause we could make a band, lol. xDDD
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Post by eric on Mar 9, 2009 19:53:40 GMT -5
Oh my goodness Dakota, thanks! And well, I haven't thought of a chorus for it yet- plus I am looking for band to play this. I haven't decided on a particular instrument yet, but from reading this over and over again and again- I realized this could even be a duo between a guy and girl! Like she knows the evil of the night and can't escape them, warning him of it's and her dangers. And then the guy isn't sure if he isgood enough for her and would do anything for her, but then again doesn't want her to get hurt by him. I was thinking this would make a good screamo, inde, or metal song yeah it's pretty versatile!  And yeah we should totally start a band! Even though I couldn't play a instrument to save my life! |
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Post by Dakota on Mar 9, 2009 20:19:56 GMT -5
... If you could change the genre to country, I could totally get a friend of mine to play the Guitar, and one to play the drums, and I could play piano. And then, what we do, is you record the sound of us playing our pary, then you playing your part, then combine them so it sounds like we recorded together. And then we can be youtube stars. LOL.
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Post by eric on Mar 9, 2009 20:23:38 GMT -5
dude....THAT WOULD BE AWESOME! -starry eyes-
I would love to just hear this song cometo life and here, I'll change the colors so you youcan see the guy and girl parts.
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Post by Fox on Mar 9, 2009 20:24:02 GMT -5
I wish there could be a trumpet part, but the trumpets only good for jazz and the blues which i excel at... DX
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Post by Dakota on Mar 9, 2009 20:32:04 GMT -5
TRUMPET SOLO~! Omg, we could make a whole new genre. It'd be amazing. If you wanted, Cain-san, I could find a guy or two that wants to hang out. I have a friend who plays a wicked electric guitar.
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Post by eric on Mar 9, 2009 21:26:47 GMT -5
lol yesh! this will be asong of epic poportions! But yeah I really like the idea you had about the band and guy doing a part and I singing the female part then we could sync it all up and I love trumpet solos, and I could see one in between the line "So depressed.." and "The dark will take you in" it would be one that would speed the song up!
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Post by Dakota on Mar 10, 2009 8:40:25 GMT -5
This'll work perfectly. I was thinking, this song would sound really good like... In the song "Wake Me Up Inside" By Evanescence feat. Linkin Part, I think it'd be cool if the guy were just like... Kind of saying his parts in the under tone, like he's thinking about it. That way, we've got a little like... Almost metal, and then Jazz, and country and... WHOO~! Oh, and I think Foxy should sing the guy parts, because no one at my school likes to sing, and I don't want to drag this stupid boy who had this intense crush on me over because he'll think I like him again. >_<
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Post by eric on Mar 10, 2009 12:41:17 GMT -5
OK now we HAVE to make this song! XD And Dakota I know your pain! So maybe if Fox would like to sing the guy part then we should like tape ourselves singing and post it on the you of the tube so we can all see what we're working with. Oh and it doesn't' have to be singing my song- just any that would show how your voice sounds. When I get dressed and wake up I'll do one and try to post it on and give you guys the link!
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Post by Dakota on Mar 10, 2009 17:28:23 GMT -5
I have a special microphone that I can just use the voice and put pictures to it. My mother doesn't want me posting videos of myself on the Tube. But, I don't think she'd be opposed to just a voice or something. I'll ask when she gets home.
But, I have an idea. I'm really good with electronics and voice combinations and such, so if you had a microphone or something, and recorded the sound and sent the link/file to me (I'll make a special e-mail for things like this) I could use my amazing crafting skills, and then add some pictures and stuff to put it together and post it on the Tube, or send it back to you guys to post it because my computer's stupid and doesn't like YouTube.
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Post by Fox on Mar 10, 2009 19:00:04 GMT -5
I dont think ill be able to sing the guy part, i have a high voice sooooo yea. Sorryz!
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Post by Dakota on Mar 10, 2009 19:10:15 GMT -5
Aw, okay Foxy. I can sing the guy parts, if you guys want. I have like... This huge gap in my singing octaves. There's the high, and the low. No medium. I'll sing the guy part, and just... We'll say it's a girl part. xDD
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Post by eric on Mar 10, 2009 21:43:14 GMT -5
lol alright, let's try to post a vid of each of us singing and then post the link here or you could contact me on my myspace www.myspace.com/cyanide_kisses_sweet anytime, although I'll have to add you before we can talk. |
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Post by Fox on Mar 11, 2009 18:27:42 GMT -5
Lol, Kk dakota. and sorry Cain, i have a facebook, not a myspace.  |
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Post by eric on Mar 11, 2009 18:50:54 GMT -5
dude, I have one of everything just look up amanda odette
lmao some sites I even have more than one!
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Post by Fox on Mar 11, 2009 19:48:37 GMT -5
added. And your kidding right? Why would you need more than one? Lmao
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Post by eric on Mar 11, 2009 19:52:15 GMT -5
hahaha! I honestly don't know! I forget sometimes, then one time my parents changed the passwords for all of my acounts- so I made new ones, only to later find out the password to my old accounts... that was a fun ordeal! -sarcasm-
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Post by Fox on Mar 11, 2009 19:54:12 GMT -5
That sucks! My mom has no idea what my pass is so im hack free from her. Except, of course, when she forces me to show her.... |
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Post by Dakota on Mar 12, 2009 8:49:25 GMT -5
Lol, you guys are funny. My parents don't know my password, and it's like... The same for everything. The only one they know is my old one, and I changed that. It all started with Runescape, and the password just went on and on and on. xDD
But, sure. I'll see if I can do that, and I'll post the youtube link here, mostly because Myspace uploads hate me. xD
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And yeah we should totally start a band! Even though I couldn't play a instrument to save my life!
