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Apr 27, 2008 17:43:50 GMT -5
Post by Jetta on Apr 27, 2008 17:43:50 GMT -5
I hate writing poetry. I don't like reading it either. I had to write this for school. I just want to know if it sounded allright to present in from of the entire class, or what I could fix about it. To understand it, you need to know that it is about a clouded leopard in a zoo.
Prisoner Frustrated, angry, and mad The cat paces Do you not think it is sad? Cousin of the king Destined to be free Prince of the jungle It’s not a mystery to me The look in his eyes Waiting, yet so dull and moping As he walks his hard packed trail Bored, disgusted, but still hoping To someday face his destiny An angry fire burns No way to let it out As his tail lashes through the ferns Silent as a snake Listening, he hears Through the fence, which he paces The laughter and the tears Of those he tries so hard to ignore Sniffing all he smells Foreign inedibles Wafting up in wells Chewing, all he tastes Not of his home What a waste Restraining a moan He shows no pain Taking one look at his coat Covered in clouds Like an unwanted joke For he is not free Angry, angry, he paces Destined to die away from home Not looking at those faces He paces, forever alone
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Apr 27, 2008 22:15:41 GMT -5
Post by catgurl1000 on Apr 27, 2008 22:15:41 GMT -5
awww..... that sounded great! *sniff* <:') i suck at poetry lol
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Apr 28, 2008 15:45:50 GMT -5
Post by Jetta on Apr 28, 2008 15:45:50 GMT -5
You think so? I think it's retarded. XD I hate poetry. *le'gasp* Romeo and Juliet is the worst. Aren't I in a good mood? (I think it's the skittle hangover)
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Apr 28, 2008 17:19:35 GMT -5
Post by catgurl1000 on Apr 28, 2008 17:19:35 GMT -5
lol, skittle hangover... i always think what i write is stupid but ppl say its good.. if not i can always think up a excuse XD
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Apr 28, 2008 17:53:19 GMT -5
Post by waterspirt45 on Apr 28, 2008 17:53:19 GMT -5
Me too I write fanfics on other sites. Despite how many reniews I get saying "wow i like your story please update soon." I still don't like my story. lol skittles hangover. Poam is pretty good.
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Apr 28, 2008 18:00:58 GMT -5
Post by catgurl1000 on Apr 28, 2008 18:00:58 GMT -5
yeah i i'm writing 1 fanfic and SUPPOSED to be starting a vampire story on quizilla... but im so stiknin' lazy XD
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Apr 28, 2008 18:43:24 GMT -5
Post by waterspirt45 on Apr 28, 2008 18:43:24 GMT -5
Yeah and I'm spossed to to update in Fanfiction.net but I'm sooooo lazy you know what I mean? +I got writers block I've had it for 3mounths now I was almost done with the next hapter then the power went out and I lost al of my work. It took me two whole mouths. *sniffle sniffle*
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Apr 28, 2008 18:46:09 GMT -5
Post by catgurl1000 on Apr 28, 2008 18:46:09 GMT -5
aww, i hate when that stuff happens, lol writers block is my disease!
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Apr 28, 2008 18:56:15 GMT -5
Post by waterspirt45 on Apr 28, 2008 18:56:15 GMT -5
*sniffel* Thanks. yeah It usually takes me a day to uodate but in the middl eof the story i go blank... wait quizilla. oh maybe SilentRain04 updated. She writes HItsugaya fanfics He's a guy from bleach do u watsh that?
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Apr 28, 2008 18:59:19 GMT -5
Post by waterspirt45 on Apr 28, 2008 18:59:19 GMT -5
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Apr 28, 2008 19:00:21 GMT -5
Post by catgurl1000 on Apr 28, 2008 19:00:21 GMT -5
lol, no i don't watch Bleach, but a friend or 2 of mine does, i hear its pretty good but i haven't got around to it yet lol
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Apr 28, 2008 19:04:27 GMT -5
Post by waterspirt45 on Apr 28, 2008 19:04:27 GMT -5
Yeah it's pretty good. How do you think I learned Japanese. I watch it in it's original Japanese version and you will be surprised how fast you catch on. With sub titles of course
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Apr 28, 2008 19:56:19 GMT -5
Post by Tagg on Apr 28, 2008 19:56:19 GMT -5
that's cool. I don't like bleach that much. Poor graphics.
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Apr 28, 2008 20:22:38 GMT -5
Post by waterspirt45 on Apr 28, 2008 20:22:38 GMT -5
Meh it all depends. the Japanese vorions has okay graphics.
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Apr 28, 2008 21:24:37 GMT -5
Post by Tagg on Apr 28, 2008 21:24:37 GMT -5
i just don't really like the punching the ground part and it flying up twenty feet, or the getting hit by something that would usually kill a person but they only fly back a few feet and hit something. its my problem, but i don't have imagination that way.
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Apr 29, 2008 12:50:32 GMT -5
Post by catgurl1000 on Apr 29, 2008 12:50:32 GMT -5
lol, my dad is like that in a way, when we watch movies he's ALWAYS like "ooh wait pause it! you see the that? its was like this now its like that." blah blah blah... -__- its so annoying
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Apr 29, 2008 17:19:16 GMT -5
Post by waterspirt45 on Apr 29, 2008 17:19:16 GMT -5
;Dlol... Wait aren't we supposed to be reviewing the poem. Meh this is okay to.
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Apr 29, 2008 21:03:10 GMT -5
Post by Tagg on Apr 29, 2008 21:03:10 GMT -5
haha, that's funny Shay. XD
Were allowed to talk on these about whatever we want. XD Jehte doesn't mind. Right A-*cough* Shay? srry, I have a cold. XD
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Apr 30, 2008 13:04:15 GMT -5
Post by catgurl1000 on Apr 30, 2008 13:04:15 GMT -5
lol, suuurrreee ya do lol, aww my baby bros crying i better check on him
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Apr 30, 2008 19:41:19 GMT -5
Post by Jetta on Apr 30, 2008 19:41:19 GMT -5
ug..... i just got done babysitting two little girls... the two year old threw a screaming/laughing fit and dumped out my stuff then threw her crayons at the nine month old. and around the entire house. it was pretty fun. XD
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